each sentence with purpose. With this clarity of intent in mind, begin to address each of the points you
have already identified in your outline.
Step 3: Tighten up the writing
Ideally, you have left enough time in the application process that you can now put your essay aside for
a day or two and return to it later with fresh eyes. As you read through it now, ask yourself: have you
conveyed all the points you needed to? Is there anything missing? What could enhance the essay?
Have you demonstrated why you are a competitive candidate? Many students will begin to realize that
they have already exceeded the page limit or that they have not developed their arguments fully. Now
is the time to be very economical: what can be cut in order to make room for something more
important? Again, the goal is to avoid an essay that rambles: you only have your reader’s attention for
about a page, so make the most of it!
Step 4: Edit, edit, edit…and then edit more
With every application cycle, there are always a handful of applications that are rejected outright simply
because the writer submitted the wrong essay, submitted an essay rife with spelling/grammatical
mistakes, and/or submitted a rambling and incoherent essay. Do not be that student. Some strategies
for editing:
• Read your essay backwards. If you read without meaning, you are more likely to catch stray
misspellings, punctuation oddities, and even sometimes grammatical errors.
• Identify a trusted “outside reader.” Your outside reader should come to your essay cold, which is
to say, without knowing much about the essay or why you’re writing it. If your outside reader
can’t work out those details from the essay itself, then you need to go back and fill in some
gaps. You have also, hopefully, chosen someone who would be good at noticing any
spelling/grammar/punctuation issues along the way.
• Take completed essays to the Center for the Study of Teaching and Writing's Writing Center.
Please keep in mind that they do not proofread texts: they can help with editing, make
suggestions about your essay, and even point you in the direction of good proofreading tips, but
the actual proofreading is on you.
Mechanics
Below, please find two sections that cover the more mechanical aspect of essay writing. In the first
section, we will go over the basics: the very least that your essay needs to have going for it. In the
second section, we will take a look at finer tuning.
Avoid the Junk Food of Writing: Clichés
Clichés are words and phrases that have lost meaning because of overuse; adding them to a personal
statement, therefore, does nothing to build your case and, instead, merely adds empty filler to what is
probably a very limited word count. Essays relating to study abroad give rise to their own clichés. A
strong personal statement will not include any of the following without significant polishing:
• Your love of or passion for any of the following: culture, traveling, new people, new experiences,
new food, etc.
• Your desire to relate to (insert relative here) who grew up in (insert name of country here)
• Your wish to immerse yourself in the local culture
• The “once-in-a-lifetime” nature of study abroad
There is nothing inherently wrong with any of these statements (particularly if they are true), but it is
worth keeping in mind that virtually every single other student is writing something nearly identical. If
you are keen to write on these topics, your goal is to demonstrate how you/your situation transcend the
cliché.